Fractal Muse
Republic University
Minmatar Republic
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Posted - 2012.03.21 20:22:00 -
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Alrensu wrote:https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=11DCWdnBOI1kdq1XskS8vxocnXMjWKf1-N2rGty1gODk
I am unable to post in the corporation/alliance forums, so the next best place was here.
I would like peoples thoughts on the document, I am not looking for investors as I already have that issue covered.
I am simply looking for peoples thoughts on changes or additions to the document
First thought:
This reads like a template for a business project proposal in a large company.
With each section I keep wondering what the original project proposal was for and for what company. Then I wondered how many managers the project had. I then decided that maybe this was for a government organization since the use of 'stakeholders' comes up time and time again. Finally, I decided that this is taken from a governmental template of an Australian government department and possibly the Department of the Prime Minister (dpmc).
I would suggest a rewrite to something that is more of a project plan than a proposal. Skip the fluff that isn't required for the creation of a corp and its move to Wormhole space. There is no need for 'Business Objectives' (the corp is not a business and the plan you are laying out isn't one either), 'Product Description' or 'Deliverables.'
If you want to write the framework of your corporation then do so by stating clearly the scope, vision, mission statement, objective, and policies thereof.
If you want to further describe your corporation's plan of action then, by all means, write a project plan with milestones.
But, please, stop mixing formats of a proposal with a plan. A wormhole location is not a deliverable. It wasn't created. Instead, you are looking for the milestone of having found an appropriate location after the activity of searching for a location. I can see why you used the term 'deliverable' for location but... really.. ergh. That's a personal preference on my part.
I loved the "Estimated Cost" section. That one made me giggle. Are your costs in ISK? hours? Dollars?
Anyway, my suggestion: Rewrite this into something other than a Scope Statement for a Governmental organization. EVE Online is a game. A document like this will likely scare folk away especially those who've dealt with beaurocrazies in some manner, shape, or form.
That being written I agree that it is a very good idea to have some sort of Corporate structure written down. I think it's great that you are putting thought into your goal.
Good luck!
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